dusk amplifies
tracheal breath
unseen mouths
ajar whisper
buried ears
beneath sleep
nocturnal hush
covered dreams
night cracks
dark maw
birds' cries
through trees
avian eyes
fleeting light
feathers rasp
black leaves
passage ajar!! LOL
it looks good this way Musicboi
as I suggested the changes
You do need to write more!
yes, thank you chicory for your suggestion of the stanza switch! the trachea remains intact
dark maw CAW CAW!
listen it's a raven~ Poe!
I rather enjoyed this MB.
Unusual and nice! But what does it mean? Care to explain???
This poem talks about the closure of the day from a nonhuman point of view
Nothing scary or wierd just the rhytmn of nature.
thanks y'all.
it is as chicory says, essentially; although i suppose i was trying to make it a little weird.
actually, i self-imposed the format of only allowing two words per line - a little self imposed exercise, if you will
hey, how about we do an online workshop with that?
i'll post something in the workshop section, check it out if you like
