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Re: POETRY WORKSHOP MONDAY, NOVEMBER 23RD @ 6:30 PM
November 20, 2009 by musicboy
no worries, wannabe; we're glad you're here!
Re: POETRY WORKSHOP MONDAY, NOVEMBER 23RD @ 6:30 PM
November 20, 2009 by musicboy
i didn't know you were writing a book!
you can show up, just don't say you're wannabe ;) that will add intrigue
Re: Parade
November 18, 2009 by musicboy
yes, this does remind me of detroit girls a little :)
although i believe this one has more... pomp?
i like the line:
and I
march among
a sea
of banners
proclaiming
the right
to be
indeed..
interesting poem.
i'm not so sure about the ending; although my opinion might change ;)
Re: POETRY WORKSHOP MONDAY, NOVEMBER 23RD @ 6:30 PM
November 16, 2009 by musicboy
wannabe, whenever you wannabe there
Re: a poem by Faiz Ahmed Faiz
November 13, 2009 by musicboy
there's a little bit of a lull here at work, so i got a little more time come on here and post a few things/ see what's shakin
POETRY WORKSHOP MONDAY, NOVEMBER 23RD @ 6:30 PM
November 13, 2009 by musicboy
This workshop will be, as has been the trend, one of feedback and critiquing, on and of poetry participants bring in.
We will start off the workshop with a nifty writing exercise from chicory, as well; so come ready to write!
Re: a poem by Faiz Ahmed Faiz
November 13, 2009 by musicboy
aah, i like it; indeed, though, there are many commas. but i'm down with that
Re: Polaris
November 13, 2009 by musicboy
cool cool;
i like especially the line,
'But when you are in your real element,
The constant force in the northern sky'
Re: Zomg! New Idea!
November 13, 2009 by musicboy
verily i know not; maybe our poets are ruminating :)
Re: CALIFORNICATION
November 13, 2009 by musicboy
indeed, it was a surprise, this voting outcome;
this poem also reminds me of that chili peppers song:
Re: marooned
November 5, 2009 by musicboy
i do like this haiku, although as artisanne pointed out, there is a surplus of syllables. not too big a deal though.
my haiku comment was just a little reference to artisanne's directive, "Don't try to write the "perfect" haiku." 
Re: marooned
November 5, 2009 by musicboy
elusive haiku
whose form suggests perfection
why remain hidden?
Re: Zomg! New Idea!
November 5, 2009 by musicboy
indeed i feel the pain you must,
for my pc also bit the dust.
Re: ONLINE WORKSHOP - TWO WORDS (STILL OPEN!)
November 5, 2009 by musicboy
indeed it does! a nice poem, wannabe.
ONLINE WORKSHOP - TWO WORDS (STILL OPEN!)
November 4, 2009 by musicboy
So, following up from my thread in the Feedback section, here's the task:
Write a one or two stanza poem, with each line containing only two words.
Try to give it a unifying theme... waiting for someone, describing a daily series of events, events in history, the activity of an animal, etc etc.
Re: poem from 10/26 workshop
November 4, 2009 by musicboy
hey, how about we do an online workshop with that?
i'll post something in the workshop section, check it out if you like
Re: poem from 10/26 workshop
November 4, 2009 by musicboy
thanks y'all.
it is as chicory says, essentially; although i suppose i was trying to make it a little weird.
actually, i self-imposed the format of only allowing two words per line - a little self imposed exercise, if you will
